First, jump from chapter one into Dair returning to his home for the first time in nearly 4 years, and dealing with how it has not been kept up. This would lay out the area of Fairview that he lived in and what his house looks like. Lodge, actually, because it used to be a small ski resort kind of place.
It would mean jumping back and forth in the timeframe, where Adam's life would come out in reference to actions happening around Dair as he prepares for his wedding and winds up being charged with assault for a fight with a dickhead named Bobby.
Probably a more demanding read but it might prevent any part of it seeming tedious. I think. You never really know. It would also give a specific impression of Adam that would be challenged in parts. Make the reader question what they know about him. For example, presenting him as a loving, caring young man...who got caught stealing money out of Dair's wallet.
But this would also necessitate changes in the tone and sentence structure as Adam tells some parts of the story in his nearly poetic style, then the rest is done in plain third person omniscient, and I'm not sure I like jumping back and forth, in that way.
Second is having Adam tell his story up to the point he and Dair become lovers...or even to when Adam dies...and then jump the four years to him returning after lawsuits and court fights and becoming involved with Wallace, his gay attorney.
This would be a fairly straightforward way to tell the story. Going A, B, C, D, E...and so forth before shifting form to jump around. Go to third person and change the tone to casual. Have the trials and legal wrangling come out in bits and pieces as it goes along.
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