Chapter Three of DW is not going right...

I'm doing my usual thing of going through it and peeling back layers, slowly, slowly, very slowly...and it still doesn't feel right. I don't get a sense that the boys in that house are really inhabiting space in Adam's story. More like cyphers.

There are 7 boys between the ages of 15 and 17, with Rory always jockeying to be the alpha dog, but they're all still so bland and unreal. The thing is, I'm not 100% I need more than that because once Adam leaves the house he doesn't see them or contact them, again.

So I'll keep doing passes until I feel I've gone as deep as I can go, with them.

I've set it up like a New Orleans whorehouse, but with clients who have to make appointments and come in at different times so no one sees anyone else. If that's even possible. Another aspect of this part of the story I need to make sure about.

I dunno...maybe I'm just getting to be too anal on this. I can be. It could also be wariness about being too open about the sexual hijinks that could be going on.

Except, they have to reserve that for their visitors. And I've established that two of them have to take drugs to handle what they're doing. Which leads to problems. Which could be explored a bit more.

The only consistent thought between them all is, where they currently live is a lot better than the abusive homes, where they were. The man running the house is very careful as to which boys he chooses to live there.