Another pass on PM done...

I finished inputting the changes for PM, so now will print it out and do another pass. What you see here is the title page; I still like the book's cover, as is. The model is from Brazil -- Saulo Melo, who could be the image of Surfer, in the story.

I'm not crazy about the final voice-over; it's messy and too all-encompassing. Needs to be stronger and to the point, but right now I can't think of what else to say. It's there to tie up the last of the strings in this story...and way overdoes it.

No...actually, it just doesn't do a good job of explaining what the Porno Manifesto is and why it matters. I know a lot of people will be turned off just by the title, so I want it to have a solid meaning before it goes out in the world to do battle.

It's now at 120 pages. I'm going to see if I can cut back by 10 pages. I don't usually have much luck with that, but it never hurts to try. There may be too much description, and there are long passages with no dialogue that can probably be condensed.

I'm off on another trip to NYC on the train, come Monday, this time using the roomette both ways so I'll have not only comfort and a meal, but will be able to work on both PM and the artwork for A65's video/slide-show. If I can make that happen...

I'll be doing a lot of experimenting, now.