The struggle is real...

I can't find the voice I want to use to tell the beginning of Darian's Point. I like verse for the harpies' comments; it has a greater heft when relating their actions and feelings and pain. But I can't do that all the way through; it would be unreadable. Yet when I write something in a narrative style, the verse makes those words seem childish and hollow.

I know it's still early and it did take me a while to find Brendan's voice for APoS. But I also remember how much work it was to get there...and that much of what I'd written I had to chuck because it no longer worked. Some of which I'd really liked.

I'm also wondering if I need the same voice and style to use throughout the three portions of the story. Should I go for a more ancient manner of speech in a Gaelic form for the first part? Or maintain the verbal style of Brendan's father, when he's telling the myth? Use a straightforward narrative style in the second part? And do first person in the last part, from the viewpoint of D'Arcy? She's a young Irish woman manipulating Perry O'Brien, the last descendent of Caoimhín's, into confronting the horror cursing his family.

I don't want to go first person with Perry. I don't want readers to know if he lives at the end or sacrifices himself to end the curse. If he's telling the story, that pretty much establishes what happens.

But seriously, what I've worked up so far is on the level of bad Danielle Steele gothic romance nonsense. What someone once told me was a modern bodice-ripper. I'd like to think I'm better than that.

I'd like to...