I'm bouncing back and forth about the idea of changing who the killer is, in Underground Guy. I had it involved with political intrigue...but now it seems to want to be about revenge inflicted for revenge taken...and that still feels too obvious. The question is, would the people involved in either scenario go so far as to commit 4 murders and attempt a fifth to achieve their goals? Not sure about that.
The political intrigue angle involves Tawfi being next in line to the throne of his Middle Eastern country. He's been bred to become a leader, in control, while his younger brother is pushed aside...so the man's ambitious wife takes it upon herself to make him the next king in place of Tawfi. How she does it is a mixture of lies, conspiracy, cold-blooded murder and double-dealing that nearly gets Dev and Reg killed.
The other possibility is that Griffin Faure arranges with Tawfi's sister-in-law to not only make him seem unfit for the crown but to also get even with Devlin for what he did...and never mind he started it by defrauding Devlin's family of nearly $300K. He wants to take down Tawfi because he's being a pain about a business venture their two companies are joining up for and thinks the brother will be easier to manipulate...which is true; Tawfi's too hard to negotiate with.
Other possibilities are Kenneth Tavelscha, a Congressman Dev took on in college, and Ryan Orriaggio, a Chicago cop who manhandled his wife (Dev hates cops, already, so it doesn't take much to set him off)...but those don't feel right. Too arbitrary. I'm still leaning towards the political one, but won't know till the book's done. I couldn't decide on who killed Owen Taylor till the fourth draft of the book and Jake showed me how it happened and how he found out. Then it became as solid as concrete.
I'm hoping the same will happen, here...just sooner...
The political intrigue angle involves Tawfi being next in line to the throne of his Middle Eastern country. He's been bred to become a leader, in control, while his younger brother is pushed aside...so the man's ambitious wife takes it upon herself to make him the next king in place of Tawfi. How she does it is a mixture of lies, conspiracy, cold-blooded murder and double-dealing that nearly gets Dev and Reg killed.
The other possibility is that Griffin Faure arranges with Tawfi's sister-in-law to not only make him seem unfit for the crown but to also get even with Devlin for what he did...and never mind he started it by defrauding Devlin's family of nearly $300K. He wants to take down Tawfi because he's being a pain about a business venture their two companies are joining up for and thinks the brother will be easier to manipulate...which is true; Tawfi's too hard to negotiate with.
Other possibilities are Kenneth Tavelscha, a Congressman Dev took on in college, and Ryan Orriaggio, a Chicago cop who manhandled his wife (Dev hates cops, already, so it doesn't take much to set him off)...but those don't feel right. Too arbitrary. I'm still leaning towards the political one, but won't know till the book's done. I couldn't decide on who killed Owen Taylor till the fourth draft of the book and Jake showed me how it happened and how he found out. Then it became as solid as concrete.
I'm hoping the same will happen, here...just sooner...
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